I admire your proactive attitude to constantly improve in response to advice. I sincerely feel that this is a further testament of your leadership capabilities -- by listening and acting upon feedback, you'll be a great asset as a management associate!
From your letter, your personality really stands out--someone who has been very actively involved in the many types of leadership roles, with great interpersonal skills and an exceptional contribution to community. You are definitely well qualified to take up the job. Wish you all the best in your applications! :)
I like the way you do things. I wouldn't think I would write a new letter for the mistakes. Nevertheless, you did and great job!
Content wise, it is very relevant. Your qualification and what you did definitely add on to your leadership qualities and volunteering hear. However, there is an unsubstantiated point. You wrote "I am a fast-learner." However, I don't think you mentioned that in you letter. Nevertheless, the rest of it is very persuasive and I would definitely choose you to come for interview.
In organization of ideas, you did an excellent job. Your introduction and body cohere together. Each paragraph has a main idea which is not jumbled up. However, there is a little lack of links between each paragraph in the body. Overall, good organization make this letter easy to read.
I have always like your use of language. It is concise and clear. The idea is concrete with correct use of words. However, I have a little doubt. In "area; and", ";" is used to separate ideas. However, I always though ";" is used to join 2 sentences of equal importance. Other than that, it is a great job. Well-done.
Hi Yuen May!
ReplyDeleteI admire your proactive attitude to constantly improve in response to advice. I sincerely feel that this is a further testament of your leadership capabilities -- by listening and acting upon feedback, you'll be a great asset as a management associate!
From your letter, your personality really stands out--someone who has been very actively involved in the many types of leadership roles, with great interpersonal skills and an exceptional contribution to community. You are definitely well qualified to take up the job. Wish you all the best in your applications! :)
Hi May,
ReplyDeleteI like the way you do things. I wouldn't think I would write a new letter for the mistakes. Nevertheless, you did and great job!
Content wise, it is very relevant. Your qualification and what you did definitely add on to your leadership qualities and volunteering hear. However, there is an unsubstantiated point. You wrote "I am a fast-learner." However, I don't think you mentioned that in you letter. Nevertheless, the rest of it is very persuasive and I would definitely choose you to come for interview.
In organization of ideas, you did an excellent job. Your introduction and body cohere together. Each paragraph has a main idea which is not jumbled up. However, there is a little lack of links between each paragraph in the body. Overall, good organization make this letter easy to read.
I have always like your use of language. It is concise and clear. The idea is concrete with correct use of words. However, I have a little doubt. In "area; and", ";" is used to separate ideas. However, I always though ";" is used to join 2 sentences of equal importance. Other than that, it is a great job. Well-done.
Cheers,
Billet